where the days stretch out, expanse in green and gold
& skies melt in illumined heights & azure walls
for the hallowed halls bedecked in glistening cut
in crowds but grace which sweeps and curves to core
a golden cage marks one the heart beats for
how love strains forth in reach & in like is met
no dream so sweet imagined if not once felt
and blooms the silent pledge made whole in earnest hope
so sadly part... but only til bond, stretched, pulls close once more.
(c) final version May 2006
4 comments:
Can I compress my emotions in a single phrase?
If only I had wings to fly over the thousand miles ...
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I like your poetic dimension of view. If I were to write about Mashad, it would take me a minimum of five stanzas - by the end of which the reader would've already buried his head within the stack of his keyboard [:*(].
Truly, its a talent to be able to fully express ones thoughts in little words. An attribute labelled as 'جامع كلمات ' - someone who polishes his message with chosen words.
May He who inspires you to write in the praise of Ahlul Bait reward you in totality.
Wsalaam
thank you for such warm praise! in defence of your style, your poems have a stronger plot, often containing reflections of historical events as well as your own perspective... which you expertly mesh together. there is a feast for the believer in your works... while this is more like a single red strawberry. by no means satiating on its own!
this poem was just a little something to express the mixed sweet/sad feeling i had at leaving the city.
may Allah grant you those wings, and open invitations to you for all realms in the heavens and earth.
thank you for your visit,
with salam.
Salaams
Mashad! Ah :wub: A place which is always within the heart! I miss it :(
Nice poem. Maybe its just me but I get the feeling that you try to write small poem like maybe 2-3 stanzas at the most and express all your feelings within those! While Sis Mardhiya does the opposite she makes it long which is good too. I guess as a reader when its a long poem I feel that when reading it there is a slowness which makes it better to understand while when its a short poem you need to re read it a few times to get it! sorry I hope I am making sense! :hijabi:
May Allah bless you for your hardwork!
Wsalaams
P.s Visiting times for my blog is not after midnight for UKers :P
while this is more like a single red strawberry. by no means satiating on its own!
I beg to disagree sis... you've cropped many varied emotions in this poem - which makes the reader content, rather even surpassing his normal dose of motive, of inspiration. And that on itself is worthy of applauds.
I've had myself still enchanted by the description of the true awakening of the soul upon sighting mashad ... its a heaven for those still longing for a union with their Imam.
And thank you for the praises and grace which you've offerred. Ameen to the dua - may Allah bless u.
Wassalam.
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